For Carlos Hernandez

I shall try a new form, I think. First: because it will amuse my beloved; second: because forms are hard–and because a level-up challenge seems particularly appropriate at this moment–this very moment–when I am at my ease, and he is sitting perpendicular from me on this L-shaped couch, racing time to finish the last chapters of his novel; third, because I want to.
Here are the rules to the Ae Freislighe form, (pronounced “ay fresh-lee”) from which I have copied a little below.
- Quatrain stanzas (4-line stanzas)
- 7 syllables per line
- Lines 1 and 3 rhyme together, but they rhyme as three syllables (xxa)
- Lines 2 and 4 rhyme together as two syllables (xb)
- The final syllable, word, or line of the entire poem should be the same as the entire poem begins (the poetic term for this is dunadh)
- Poem can be as concise as one stanza and scale out as far as a poet wishes to push it
PAPER: Ae Freislighe
Autumn is our cityscape
Last-gasp roses, gutter leaf
Monster mask and witty jape
Hot wind, sly rainfall’s mischief
You, near, lounging: ankles crossed
Haircut I gave you grown out
Brows drawn, in prose-tangles lost
Coffee enough to drown doubt
Book: this pressure in your chest
Book: released and billowing
Book: your labor and your quest
Book: high-burning, slow-glowing
Soon I’ll read it page to page
Then–done, turned in, time for us
Work outlives us, age to age
Long after we’ve gone to dust
Tender, our shared history
Over the rest, gently drape
This scrim of dim mystery
Autumn is our cityscape
AAAAHHHHHHH I love this so much
It was so FUN to try a new FORM!!!
I love this too. I had read it quickly when posted, but am now taking time to be leisurely and soak it in. I am glad I am on your email list to keep me informed and so when I FINALLY get to sift through my emails and come upon this I am SO HAPPY! A different pace than when I try to scan FB for all the things that might have passed me by.
I love that you are taking your time, possibly even on a leisurely SITADAY! It makes me want to write MORE BLOGS, just for YOU and Amalface, who has subscribed. Like little secret letters. Only public.